The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
The above argument from the memo of vice president seems to have a number of unwarranted assumptions regarding the pest control services provided by the two different company. Considering his summary, the change of suspect is more likely to increase about the pest damage. The argument drifts away from the reality if these assumptions do not hold true.
It has been mentioned that new Fly-away pest company provided service at warehouse in palm city whereas the initial Buzzoff pest company provided service at Wintervale. The vice president has not considered the working means, area, volume and environment of these two warehouses. The controlling pest methods can be different in two warehouses and others influencing factor might be responsible for food damage.
The vice president has calculated the service provided by the different pest control company in terms of final loss only. The total amount of the food in the warehouse remains vague. It is possible that the damage of $20000 could be the smaller portion of the total worth of food in palm city and opposite in the case to wintervale. The measure of overall effectiveness of the pest control is unstated.
The final conclusion is lead by returning to buzzoff which cannot be taken as the gest of the analysis. The hidden aspects of the two warehouse like the management and technology might causes impact in the results of the controlling pest at two different warehouses. The comparison seems to be unfair and illogical.
The assumptions by the president overshades the reality of the working and effectiveness of the two pests control company. Unless considering these fallacies, jumping in the conclusion to return to bezzoff seems harsh decision.
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Comments
e-rater score report
flaws:
No. of Words: 279 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 279 350
No. of Characters: 1414 1500
No. of Different Words: 134 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.087 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.068 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.767 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.227 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.2 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... might be responsible for food damage. The vice president has calculated the servi...
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Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ol company in terms of final loss only. The total amount of the food in the warehou...
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Line 4, column 104, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...t be taken as the gest of the analysis. The hidden aspects of the two warehouse lik...
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Line 4, column 267, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lling pest at two different warehouses. The comparison seems to be unfair and illog...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ison seems to be unfair and illogical. The assumptions by the president overshades...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, regarding, so, whereas
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 13.6137724551 22% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1442.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 279.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16845878136 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83101941565 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 204.123752495 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476702508961 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.8002939436 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.1333333333 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.73333333333 5.70786347227 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35436863815 0.218282227539 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11335920692 0.0743258471296 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0933067697204 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19966889419 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110289411939 0.0628817314937 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.3799401198 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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