In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Childhood obesity and its consequences related with the well-beings are a globally pressing problem when it comes to the assertion that the government have to fall on the responsibility.To be precise, I partly side with this argument, while in fact, this is attributed to the obligation of family.
On the one hand, governments shoulder a vital burden on curbing the obesity rate in children. The government have to have resources and powers to enact the policies to discourage the gradual detrioration of this ailment. It is exemplified by an evidence that in Vietnam, the government promultiates policies for each every school to be compelled to provide students with healthy and nutrinious meals and boost them to engage in physical activities actively. Similarily, the government prohibit myriad advertiments of junk foods or proccessed ones in the purpose of preventing the appetitie for them.
On the other hand, families have to assume responsibility through sharing this serious burden. In reality, they are primary guardians, thus there is no doubt that they take a second role in tarnishing the rising percentage of obesity in their offspring. If the family shirk the obligation, the children effortlessly are in poor health in long-term. To be given example, numerous European parents force children to watch rapid weight loss programs with the aim of ensuring that the children have no tendency of eradicating this diasease.
To sum up, whilst the government takes a leading responsibility in enact myriad policies, the primary guardians should have a huge attention to health of their offspring.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, so, thus, well, while, in fact, no doubt, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1363.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 255.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34509803922 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08656101518 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592156862745 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.6801381908 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.3 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.7 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140855670537 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589922604193 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0359019401894 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862021114601 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.029384560488 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.83 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.