Government should introduce healthcare which prevents illness rather than cures it. How far do you agree with the statement?
It is often argued by a number of people that preventing illness issues is much better than treating them. In my opinion, I partially agree with that point of view for several reasons.
The first argument is that preventing illness helps people to save much money that is spent on medical expenses. When people catch any diseases, they ought to spend a lot of money buying drugs, paying hospital fees. Furthermore, if people get a serious disease, they even have to invest a huge amount of money to save their lives. However, not many people can afford to pay that much.
Another strong point is that promoting prevention methods may encourage people to live a healthy life. In other words, if he wants to remain healthy, he has to protect himself from a variety of negative elements. To do this work most effectively, the government should invest in highlighting the benefits of a healthy lifestyle by launching health awareness campaigns.
On the other hand, there is no way to prevent all health problems. For example, cancer is one of the most complex illnesses which cannot be prevented easily by just following a healthy lifestyle. Besides, accidents from work or on the road will also cause injuries which need medical treatment. If the government focuses mainly on prevention, there may be less money for urgent healthcare and people could suffer.
To sum up, I believe that governments should produce a balance of prevention and medical treatment, but the main focus should be on prevention rather than cure.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 109, Rule ID: MAIN_FOCUS[1]
Message: Use simply 'focus'.
Suggestion: focus
...evention and medical treatment, but the main focus should be on prevention rather than cur...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ld be on prevention rather than cure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, as to, for example, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1272.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96875 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61763055951 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62890625 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 381.6 506.74238477 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5127969838 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.8571428571 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2857142857 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223002464857 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670681607281 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690830327924 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131185105208 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806919408791 0.056905535591 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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