The following appeared in a memo from the owner of Green Thumb Gardening Center, a small
business serving a suburban town.
"There is evidence that consumers are becoming more and more interested in growing their
own -vegetables. A national survey conducted last month indicated that many consumers were
dissatisfied with the quality of fresh vegetables available in supermarkets. And locally, the
gardening magazine Great Gardens has sold out at the Village News stand three months in a
row. Thus, we at Green Thumb Gardening Center can increase our profits by greatly
expanding the variety of vegetable seeds we stock for gardeners this coming spring."
The memo contends that there is an increase on the part of consumers to grow their own vegetable and the following evidences were given to substantiate this claim. It was said that in a national survey conducted last month that consumer were not satisfied with the quality of vegetables available and that the gardening magazine by Great Garden sold out for three months at the news stand in the village. For this reason, the memo posited that Green Thumb Garden Center can now increase their profit expanding their seed stock. This memo is based on a lot of assumptions and therefore it is logically flawed.
First, the memo cited an example of a national survey conducted last month which indicated dissatisfaction on the part of consumer due to the quality of vegetables available. The survey conducted was a national survey and hence does not necessarily represent the interest of the in the suburban town. Perhaps they were only dissatisfied with the quality of the vegetables because those that were brought in that particular month were of low quality. In addition, the vegetable quality might also be okay in every other place and only those in the supermarket didn’t meet the satisfaction of the consumers.
In addition, the writer bolstered his points that a garden magazine sold out at the village news stand. Perhaps people in the village who purchased the vegetable are more interested in reading the magazine to broaden their knowledge and not necessarily because they want to start their own garden. Perhaps the increase in sales was due to tourist in the area purchasing more magazines during their visit. It can also be due to the fact that the magazine featured another story in the last three month that the people in the village where more interested in reading.
Furthermore, the assumption that Green Thumb Garden Center profit will increase by increasing the variety of seeds that is being stocked is logically flawed. Except it can be particularly proven that the survey represented the interest of people in the suburban town and that people in the village purchased the magazine because they were interested in starting their own garden, it would not be convinced.
In sum, to substantiate this claim, the speaker must provide a survey representing the interest of the people in the suburban town and provide evidence that they’re more willing to purchase more seeds to create their own garden.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 406 350
No. of Characters: 1989 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.489 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.899 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.61 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.169 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.605 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...eet the satisfaction of the consumers. In addition, the writer bolstered his po...
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...lage where more interested in reading. Furthermore, the assumption that Green T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, hence, so, therefore, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2026.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01485148515 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66113284649 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420792079208 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8068301231 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.066666667 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.9333333333 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342660914753 0.218282227539 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122175968215 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759200664096 0.0701772020484 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202946661136 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472161854315 0.0628817314937 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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