Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Nowadys, no one can deny the role of celebrities on the behavior of people. Despite the fact that the old people are attracted to celebrities, it is my firm conviction that younger people are accepting and giving priority to the celebrities opinions more. There are several reasons, two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the reason why younger people have more tend to celebrities ideas is that they see them as their hero. Most young people want to reach positions such as being a famous actor. As the result, the appeal to live like their ego in acting. Correspondingly, they accept the opinions of that actor and try to continue it and do something about it. On the other hand, older people mostly reach their goals and do not need to follow someone else. For instance, my sister always want to be the next Taylor Swift so she never miss a concert nearby or any youtube video from her. Moreover, the life style of Taylor is very important for my sister. Even during her high school, she took classes as Taylor Swift proposed to her in contrary of my options.
Another worthwhile reason to mention is the internet and social media. Today, everyone has at least on cellphone. This allow them to reach any social media they want. When a person gathered by various data from everywhere, it is hard for that person to choose the correct data. Additionally, people always tend to accept the idea of someone that is known for them. Consequently, the idea of celebrities that are famous become important and rational for younger peaple. On the other hand, older people have more experiance and their beliefs are hard to alter at this age. For example, about buying a shirt, younger people mostly look for shirts that have similarity to their reference celebrity. In contrast, older people consider different indicators for their choice, not only the celebrities proposal.
In summary of what has been illustrated and discussed in details, it is a forgone conclusion that younger people give the opinions of celebrities a higher value than what older people do. Two reasons are elaborated taht can prompt this which are: Firstly, the celebrity can be their hero and secondly, the availability of the internet and social media.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than they are to older people 70
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 535, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'misses'.
Suggestion: misses
...o be the next Taylor Swift so she never miss a concert nearby or any youtube video f...
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Line 3, column 782, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...dicators for their choice, not only the celebrities proposal. In summary of what has been ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, at least, for example, for instance, in contrast, in summary, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1881.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 388.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84793814433 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54956577299 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528350515464 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5733167585 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.5 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.59090909091 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30076081649 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0836018238147 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0837688511352 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190582591619 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0137146481065 0.0645574589148 21% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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