In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are spending more and more of their time indoors. What do you think are the causes of this problem?
hat measures could best be taken to solve it?
It is true that the young people, especially the juveniles or the children have been addicted to the indoor activities, compared to the outdoor activities. There are a score of reasons behind this phenomenon, and several solutions should be adopted by the governments to improve the situation.
There are two main reasons associated with this phenomenon. The most considerable cause is that the adolescents nowadays have been hooked on the modern devices such as smartphones or laptops. This could be explained by the fact that the high technology has engaged in many vital fields from education to economy development and affected to every aspect of people's life. As a result, the youth in overall have to wasted all their time staying at home instead of taking part in frequently outdoors.. Another compelling exposition for this cause is that the school curricculum has forced the student in young age to spend time doing their homeworks to sachievement requirements by school administration and student's parents. This is mainly due to the reality which can be seen that the school and parents are putting pressure on their children. This could be perfectly exemplified by the fact that there are 70% of juveniles in particular and the youth in general have been witnessed to be suffered from the mental illness due to being on the pressure, according to a research conducted. Consequently, the young people have spend time indoors in lieu of outdoors.
Fortunately, several measures could be implemented to alleviate this problem. The first solution could be from the school and the parents's cognitive with an aim to encourage the children to spend time for outdoor activities. This could be done by the therapists who will play an vital role in persuading and raising the parent's awareness about the benefits of keeping their children to stamp out indoor activities. Therefore, the outcome for this solution could be highly appreciated and remained as a invaluable contribution to the youth's cultivation. The second solution is required the cooperation of the government and the ministry of education. This could be carried out by the number of justifiable methods which is included reducing the unecessary curriculum and school rota given by the minister and the leader of the ministry of education. This was sucessfully done by several development countries such as Poland. With the coordination between the government and the ministry of education, they have reach to an agreement of alleviating some insignificant subjects at schools and finally achieve succeed of reduce children's time for indoor activities.
In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for the adolescents spending time of doing indoors, and steps need to be taken by the government to tackle this problem. It can be predicted that with appropriate implementation of these suggested measures, this issue would likely be alleviated in the next 10 years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, as for, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 41.998997996 171% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2480.0 1615.20841683 154% => OK
No of words: 474.0 315.596192385 150% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23206751055 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95955093976 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491561181435 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 765.9 506.74238477 151% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1873105167 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.0 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277066712173 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0888780637603 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503177338375 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167665623161 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542707497831 0.056905535591 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 78.4519038076 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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