In some cultures, children are often told that they can achoeve anything if they try hard enough.
What are they advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message ?
Nowadays, In some countries in the world, adult people always teach children which they can achieve target if they try hard enough. this essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon.
Firstly, this phenomenon help the children will have good mind-set about how to achieve purpose in the future. those children had early orientate to be laborious and they will easy to become the hard – working doctor, teacher, worker, etc. in the future. For instance,Thomas Edison who achieved a lot of purpose told that “Genius is 1 percent talend and 99 percent hard-working”. moreover, the countries where had people followed this phenomenon the right way will become wealthy and healthy.
Secondly, on other hand, this phenomenon still have disadvantages if people in there countries follow this opinion have over. The result is that people become intransigent and rigid. In some cases who can not get their target while they tried hard because of those people didnt have basic ability. For example, Someone want to become single but he or she dont have good voice and person want to be as marathon runner while they have heart problem. if they followed the opinion which they have been taught by the negative way. they may do some illegal job or to harm themself to achieve their purpose and there was putrefaction for them and the social.
Overall, in some cultures, children are always taught that the can achieve every targets if they try hard enough. this phenomenon have some advantages which are children had early orientate to be laborious and those countries will wealthy and healthy. On the other hand, if people in there countries follow this opinion have over that they will become people who is intransigent and rigid. moreover, they can do illegal job or to harm
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