The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father To what extent do you agree or disagree Write an essay of about 250 words to express your opinion using specific details and examples to support your answer

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“The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between mother and father.” To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Write an essay of about 250 words to express your opinion, using specific details and examples to support your answer.

NOWADAYS, RESPONSIBILITY BETWEEN PARENTS ON RAISING OFFSPRINGS HAS BEEN A HEATED TOPIC OF DEBATES. THERE HAS BEEN A OPINION STATING THAT IT SHOULD BE EQUALLED BETWEEN FATHERS AND MOTHERS. FROM MY PERSPECTIVE, I WOULD PARTLY AGREE WITH THIS STATEMENT, BASED ON THESE FOLLOWING REASONS

ON THE ONE HAND, IT IS UNDENIABLE THAT FAIRLY-DIVIDED PARENTAL RESPONSIBILITY OUGHT TO BE ENCOURAGED DUE TO ITS SEVERAL MERITS TO BOTH CHILDREN AND PARENTS. FIRSTLY, CHILDREN RAISED WITH BOTH PARENTS' ATTENTION FREQURNTLY HAVE GREATER TRAITS AND EMOTIONAL EQUILIBRIUM THAN THEIR ATTENTION-DEFICIT COUNTERPARTS. IN OTHER WORDS, CHILDREN WHO ARE INFLUENCED BY THE ABSENCE OF A PARENT TEND TO SUFFER FROM MENTAL DISORDERS AND MORE LIKELY TO COMMIT SOCIAL EVILS. SECONDLY, REGARDING PARENTS WITH FAIR DISTRIBUTION OF CARE, IT GOES BEYOND DOUBT THAT THEY STAND A GOOD CHANCE OF LEADING A FULFILLED LIFE. TO BE MORE SPECIFIC, THEY ARE ABLE TO SPARE MORE TIME FOR PERSONAL INTERESTS AS WELL AS BE LESS SUSCEPTIBLE TO STRESS ENDANGERED BY GENERATION GAP CONFLICTS AND THEREFORE STRONGER RELATIONSHIP MAY BE ESTABLISHED THANKS TO SHARED DUTY, ENSURING THAT CHILDREN RECEIVE SUFFICIENT CARE.

ON THE OTHER HAND, THERE ARE SEVERAL GROUNDS SUBSTANTIATING THE VIEWPOINT THAT SHARED RESPONSIBILITY MAY NOT BE APPLICABLE IN MOST HOUSEHOLDS. TO BEGIN WITH, BOTH PARENTS MAY NOT HAVE EQUAL AMOUNTS OF AVAILABLE TIMES AND BE INSTANTLY READY TO PERFORM THEIR DUTY. FOR INSTANCE, A YOUNGSTER MIGHT NEED ASSISTANCE WITH SCHOOLWORK ONE EVENING AND ONE PARENT IS COMPELLED TO WORK LATE. WITHOUT DOUBT, THE DUTY WOULD FALLS TO THE OTHER PARENT. FURTHERMORE, BOTH PARENTS MAY NOT BE EQUALLY EQUIPPED OR QUALIFIED TO DO ALL TASKS. FOR EXAMPLE, A MOTHER WORKING AS A TEACHER CAN GIVE MORE CONSTANT SUPPORT TO HER OFFSPRINGS THAN THEIR FATHER EMPLOYED AS A BUSINESSMAN. AS A RESULT, DESPITE GENUINE EFFORT TO DIVIDE RESPONSIBILITY EVENLY, IT WILL NOT ALWAYS VIABLE TO DO SO.

IN CONCLUSION, WHILE EQUALLY SHARED PARENTAL RESPONSIBILTY MAY BRING SEVERAL ADVANTAGES TO PARENTS AND THEIR OFFSPRINGS, ITS DISADVANTAGES ARE ALSO CONSIDERABLE.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'WOULD' requires the base form of the verb: 'fall'
Suggestion: Fall
...ORK LATE. WITHOUT DOUBT, THE DUTY WOULD FALLS TO THE OTHER PARENT. FURTHERMORE, BOTH ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43119266055 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1145854431 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614678899083 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3401519824 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.4 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.7333333333 7.06120827912 209% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14600037249 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563013108007 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518293089566 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0978998213124 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330476879971 0.056905535591 58% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.52 8.58950901804 122% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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