Some people believe that success is about hard work and determination. Others think that success has a connection with money and personal appearance. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Wide society believe that persevere and willpower is the key of success, while some believe that wealth and personality look is more impactful to gain success, In this essay I will examine both views, and explain why I feel that persevere and willpower is the more important to achieve the glory.
To begin with, there are several reasons by some people who think that wealth and personality look was related to the glory. Firstly, money might help several people to get high-quality education. This is because, rich people able to pay the expensive tuition fee of top ranking university. Regarding the university’s excellent reputation, it could give them chance to get a job in several big companies. Secondly, people with attractive personality could reach popularity instantly. Since social media era, people could go viral easily and get much public attention by only show their beautiful face or wear a modern outfit. In connection with that, they could earn high income form get several job to be an actor or endorsement. hence, personal appearance and money could open some opportunities to be more success.
On the other hand, I believe that work harder and willpower is more essential in terms of reach the glories. The main reason to support my view that people who persevere in develop their skills could lead them to higher earning job. The more skilled and higher position in a company, the more amounts of money they can get. In order to reach high position in a company, people have to be more experienced and struggled to compete with each others. Another reason for this view that determination will accelerate people to reach their goals. this is due to, people who more consistent to learn something, they will be faster in mastering a skill. for example, athlete who constantly go to gym, will be more stronger than they who not routinely do exercise. As a result. work hard and determination guarantee people in order to be success both in skills and wealth.
In conclusion, although wealth and personality look could open wider chance to be success, thats not guarantee without working hard and willpower.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: several jobs
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Message: Use only 'stronger' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9943977591 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67022747926 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52380952381 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 555.3 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0445153589 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8421052632 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.10526315789 7.06120827912 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279576992167 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0884854996047 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767465291653 0.0667982634062 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167268178279 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019612865507 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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