It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
In the modern world,teaching history for students plays an essential role in most education systems and is the platform for the future.However, some schools tend to access local history instead of the past in the world. I completely believe all of that are equally crucial.
On the one hand,studying local history can bring a wide range of benefits to scholars.To begin with, is when schoolchildren have thorough insights to the happenings in their country,it can develop their patriotism.Additionally, most regional schools teach 2 or 3 lessons about their past in the curriculums to give them opportunity to protect and promote national customary. It is obvious that juveniles have a responsibility to know about their own history to understand their hometowns and act as contributors and introduction for the foreign customers traveling to their country.
On the other hand, besides the provincial history benefits, learning about world history shares equal importance. First of all,teenagers are able to get deeper insight into the past of the world.In addition, knowing a lot of stories in other countries can broaden their horizons and show great respect for the people in the world. For instance, after the Second World War,Vietnamese people learnt an important lesson about the detrimental impact of nuclear weapons in the country when the Uk used this in Japan and should prioritize the inhabitants of the country.
In conclusion, I believe the influence of regional and global scale history are equally important for students at their school.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, however, second, so, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1317.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 245.0 315.596192385 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37551020408 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95632099841 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24249686546 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583673469388 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 396.9 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 20.2975951904 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.9470141071 49.4020404114 184% => OK
Chars per sentence: 164.625 106.682146367 154% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.625 20.7667163134 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.25 7.06120827912 230% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268155886087 0.244688304435 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124300044091 0.084324248473 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0804085817703 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170603490706 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0412940375878 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 50.2224549098 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.52 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.1190380762 138% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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