Many children spend too much time on computers What problems can this cause What can be the solutions

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Many children spend too much time on computers. What problems can this cause? What can be the solutions?

class="MsoNormal">class="it">it class="is">is true class="that">that a class="lot">lot of student class="spend">spend class="too">too class="much">much class="time">time on computer. this class="can">can produce class="some">some detrimental effects, class="which">which requires possible solutions to be adopted

class="MsoNormal">There are many issues stemming from spending class="too">too class="much">much on computers. One obvious class="problem">problem class="is">is class="that">that Children see their parents working with computer a class="lot">lot, this lead to class="them">them being interested in computer and easily be attracted by entertainment class="content">content class="such">such as games, films or short videos. therefore, this class="can">can disrupt class="them">them from class="good">good sleep and concentrating in class, and thus class="it">it affect their score in class. Another negative effect class="is">is class="that">that spending class="time">time on computer force class="them">them to use their eyes in many hours on blue screen, class="which">which harmful to their health. And worse, this makes class="them">them emerge on an unreality world. this class="can">can result in a lack of communication skills in community and therefore class="can">can not find a class="good">good job in the future

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class="MsoNormal">Despite these problems, various actions class="can">can be taken to mitigate the situation. The first possible measure class="is">is class="that">that parents should set a strict using computer routine, class="which">which class="is">is suitable class="content">content and class="is">is exactly how many times and how long they class="can">can use computer. this class="can">can result in ensure they got enough class="time">time for lesson in class and the rest for their health, thereby having a better score. The second approach class="is">is class="that">that parents class="can">can enclosed class="them">them to class="some">some class teaching class="them">them class="some">some soft skills class="such">such as chess, swimming and marital art. this class="can">can help class="them">them not only getting away from computer but also improving their communication circle,

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class="MsoNormal">In conclusion, although spending class="too">too class="much">much class="time">time on computer class="can">can rise to many consequences, several steps class="can">can be taken to combat the situation

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3150.0 1615.20841683 195% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 11.013986014 5.12529762239 215% => Less chars per word wanted.
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 10.870700785 2.80592935109 387% => Word_Length_SD is high.
Unique words: 163.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.56993006993 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 784.8 506.74238477 155% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 2.7 1.60771543086 168% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 5.43587174349 386% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.441745544 49.4020404114 242% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 286.363636364 106.682146367 268% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0788816631572 0.244688304435 32% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642250517362 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341003760735 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0439275637861 0.151304729494 29% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0498518819271 0.056905535591 88% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 43.4 13.0946893788 331% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -47.97 50.2224549098 -96% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.4 11.3001002004 234% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 46.87 12.4159519038 377% => Coleman_liau_index is high.
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 16.5 9.78957915832 169% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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