Some people think that young people should spend free time with families instead of outside entertainment, other disagree. Discuss both views and give your
People have different views about whether youngsters should spend time for family bond or entertain outside. Although both views are reasonable, I am inclined to the idea that families time are vital than other hobbies.
Those who claim that outside entertainment is more suitable with the youth pointed out that those activities can be beneficial. For instance, by sharing the same favorite game, children care able to connect with their peers and develop communication skills. Nevertheless, spending time for solely hobbies is likely to alleviate pressure from a harsh day of working. By contrast, they assume that families time is unnecessary because of the gap generation.
On the other hand, I believe that families bond plays a crucial role in human life as it can build confidence of children. As it researched, the kid that gets along with parents tend to be braver and more out-going than others based on the ground that they know their parents always stay by their side. Another reason is that the bonding can improve mental health. By strengthen the family bond, people can receive the emotional support from their family. Due to that, it is more straightforward for them to confess the secret things. Moreover, children can learn parenting skills through family time which are detrimental in the future. People who have close relationship with families are tend to imitate the actions of their parents and learn many valuable personalities. Owing to that, most of them will become good parents and have happy families.
In conclusion, while outside entertainment undeniably has positive influence on children, families time is significant and can not be replaced. It is advisable for youth to balance time between family and entertainment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Suggestion: to parent
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Suggestion: tended
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1475.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2304964539 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78004459593 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.595744680851 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5078776558 49.4020404114 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 92.1875 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 20.7667163134 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246447253147 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0811648273466 0.084324248473 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0696026766005 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.174514972263 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0834598136307 0.056905535591 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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