The rise of technology has led to many people communicating through social media. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
With the benefits of social media in mind, a lot of people are using it to keep in touch with friends and family. while some think it is a great thing, others feel like the rise of social media has leads to more problem than we thought, especially when it comes to how we communicate face-to-face and its effects on our mental health.
Social media has made everything so much easier for people to entertain, convey information and especially stay connected. No matter where we are in the world, we still can talk or chat with others with just a few clicks. Additionally, many social media platforms such as Instagram, Facebook, Twitter...etc... help us share our thoughts, photos, and story. Social media also helps find job opportunities, making it easier to connections.
But on the other hand, we can't deny the downside of social media, it's making face-to-face communication less common. People often prefer to send a text or make a phone call to meet in person. This can lead to loneliness, even though we "connected" online. There's another issue is mental health. Social media can create a lot of pressure, especially young people. Constantly comparing yourself to others online can lead to anxiety or worse, depression. Plus, things online can be far from reality, this can make people feel like they're falling behind.
In conclusion, we can't deny the benefits of social media, but beside that, it creates more problem that it can solve. Although social media helps people find it easier to stay connect, it makes people feel less confident on their self and hurt real-life relationships. The key is finding a balance, using social media is convenient but can't replace real-world-communication." can you help me fine grammar mistake and make it better for me please?
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
... keep in touch with friends and family. while some think it is a great thing, others ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...onnections. But on the other hand, we cant deny the downside of social media, its ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 19, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...yre falling behind. In conclusion, we cant deny the benefits of social media, but ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 337, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e, using social media is convenient but cant replace real-world-communication.'...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02013422819 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20129303636 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570469798658 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0600522026 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20870853306 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687776289173 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461769024207 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137520589314 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173042966374 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
... keep in touch with friends and family. while some think it is a great thing, others ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 28, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...onnections. But on the other hand, we cant deny the downside of social media, its ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 19, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...yre falling behind. In conclusion, we cant deny the benefits of social media, but ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 337, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...e, using social media is convenient but cant replace real-world-communication.'...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, while, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1496.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02013422819 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20129303636 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570469798658 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.0600522026 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5294117647 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35294117647 7.06120827912 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20870853306 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687776289173 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461769024207 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137520589314 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0173042966374 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.54 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.