a story of a girl
One in four teens between 13-18 has an anxiety disorder. Teen anxiety can result in poor performance in school, missing out on important social experiences, and substance abuse and parents often don’t recognize the symptoms. This is one teen’s story of anxiety and treatment.: I’ve struggled with severe anxiety for as long as I can remember. In elementary school, I excelled academically, but I fell behind my peers socially and emotionally at a very early age. Middle school was the first major transition in my life. It had been extremely hard on me, while it hadn’t seemed to be nearly as hard on anybody else. I hated school, in a different way than most kids mean when they say they hate school. I really, really hated school.
So I started going to the nurse a lot to get out of class, and I started faking sick a lot to stay home. After my first year of middle school, my mom took me to see a therapist for the first time, and I got my first diagnosis: generalized anxiety disorder. Getting a diagnosis didn’t make any difference in my life. I already knew I was anxious and therapy at that time wasn’t helpful to me. I stopped going after not too long.
In seventh grade, I was in the nurse’s office every week and missed a few days of school each month. I was anxious outside of school, too. I’d started taking dance classes, but I’d skip them or make excuses to stay home. I loved to dance, but I didn’t want anybody to see me or watch me. Soon I started to struggle with my self-esteem, and it was around this time that I started to become depressed. I stopped eating because I had no appetite, and I began to develop anorexic ideologies too. I made it through the summer with a lot of video games and some online friends.
Eighth grade was even harder. I missed an impressive amount of school and even more social opportunities. I almost failed the gym because I was too anxious to change and participate. Nobody understood. My teachers would yell at me for being lazy, and my friends would judge me. I felt helpless and hopeless. That summer I started to harm myself. My sleep schedule and eating habits became worse than ever before. I never swam or did any summer activities because there were cuts all over my legs. With a lot of effort, I hid my self-harm from my family.
The transition to high school was absolutely unbearable. Often, I couldn’t even get out of bed. I hurt myself, almost every day. I told myself that if I stopped self-harming I wouldn’t have anything to keep me from killing myself. By October, it got to a point where I was completely refusing to go to school. The thought of having to go to school completely shut me down, so I went to a hospital instead. At first, I cried and screamed for my mom to never take me back, but she did. I did an outpatient program for anxiety where I did cognitive-behavioral therapy for the first time, and it was really good for me. I learned all kinds of coping skills like listening to music, calling a friend, self-talk, writing, reading, sucking or chewing on candies, and stimming methods.
When I went back to school I was able to use coping skills while I was sitting anxiously in class, instead of just being miserable and avoiding it. The school became tolerable. What helped me most was getting good medications for the first time. My psychiatrist prescribed a daily drug for anxiety and depression, and the results were absolutely wonderful.
I was still anxious and depressed, but it was an immense improvement with those meds. The rest of my freshman year after my discharge was not easy, but getting help felt amazing and suddenly my whole life made sense to me. That was a year ago now, and I just finished my sophomore year of high school. It was the best year I’ve had in a long time, I only missed five days of school! I’m on new meds that are working wonders for me. I also see a therapist whom I love, and I communicate with my parents and friends about what’s going on in my life. I’m steady and feel better than I have in years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 632, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s hard on anybody else. I hated school, in a different way than most kids mean when they say they ...
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Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...skip them or make excuses to stay home. I loved to dance, but I didn’t want anybo...
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Line 7, column 550, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...iends about what’s going on in my life. I’m steady and feel better than I have in...
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Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... and feel better than I have in years.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, so, still, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 13.1623246493 198% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 38.0 10.4138276553 365% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 116.0 24.0651302605 482% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 88.0 41.998997996 210% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3334.0 1615.20841683 206% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 737.0 315.596192385 234% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.5237449118 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.21034969277 4.20363070211 124% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.622375672 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 355.0 176.041082164 202% => Less unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481682496608 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1031.4 506.74238477 204% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 37.0 5.43587174349 681% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 17.0 0.809619238477 2100% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 48.0 16.0721442886 299% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5789714075 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 69.4583333333 106.682146367 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3541666667 20.7667163134 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.10416666667 7.06120827912 16% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 7.0 4.38176352705 160% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 25.0 3.9879759519 627% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 3.4128256513 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00842602843194 0.244688304435 3% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00207201069466 0.084324248473 2% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0143553111879 0.0667982634062 21% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00463681217418 0.151304729494 3% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0113578238599 0.056905535591 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.34 12.4159519038 67% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.99 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 0.67 Out of 6
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