Obesity has been linked to excessive sugar consumption. Some people believe that sugary drinks should be taxed to dissuade people from drinking them while others think that a tax is unnecessary and that public education is the best way to decrease sugar consumption.
Choose which position you most agree with and discuss why you chose that position. Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Obesity is an increasing problem in today's world and the main reason which causes obesity is the intake of sugary products. While some people think that the taxation on sugary products can reduce the obesity levels in the country, others believe that public education can be helpful to decrease the obesity levels since the tax for the sugary products are unnecessary. This essay wil discuss the reasons why public education is mandatory to reduce the sugar levels of the people, and why taxation does not bring much difference to the obesity levels.
Generally, when people are bombarded with the education regarding obesity due to the sugary intakes, they take it up seriously since they know it affects their health. As the awarness and the public education increases, there will be a definite period when the obesity levels in the country reduce tremendously. In my personal observation, a small district in the North of India has abandoned sugary products when they become aware of the fact that it brings about obesity. Hence, public education is crucial in bring down the levels of obesity.
Also, the taxation on sugary drinks does not reduce the obesity levels. This is because, most people are above the middle class category, and they do not mind paying taxes for these drinking substances. To sum up, taxation will be a negative burden to the people, and it does not reduce the obesity levels.
Overall, this essay discussed how the public education will lower the obesity levels, and why taxation may not be a strategy to reduce the obesity. In my opinion, public education on the sugar products and drinks should be increased so that the people are consious about the obesity factor.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 385, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (wil) must be used with a third-person verb: 'discusses'.
Suggestion: discusses
...roducts are unnecessary. This essay wil discuss the reasons why public education is man...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, if, may, regarding, so, while, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.5418719212 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 6.10837438424 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 8.36945812808 84% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 5.94088669951 135% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 20.9802955665 91% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 31.9359605911 100% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1207.87684729 118% => OK
No of words: 285.0 242.827586207 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99649122807 5.00649968141 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42082378781 2.71678728327 89% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 139.433497537 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470175438596 0.580463131201 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 379.143842365 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.71428571429 175% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.931034482759 430% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.5024630542 112% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6510770227 50.4703680194 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.666666667 104.977214359 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.75 20.9669160288 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 7.25397266985 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 6.9802955665 57% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 2.75862068966 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 2.91625615764 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304143649258 0.242375264174 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119643080073 0.0925447433944 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855096615157 0.071462118173 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198769247608 0.151781067708 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602602713868 0.0609392437508 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 12.6369458128 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 53.1260098522 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.9458128079 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 11.5310837438 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.32886699507 98% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 55.0591133005 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.94827586207 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.3980295567 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 72.2222222222 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 65.0 Out of 90
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