some say that the music is as important as other subjects in schools to promote learning in children's life. Do agree or disagree?
Recently, the phenomenon of music promotion in schools to learn as a lesson and its corresponding impact has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many that choosing music schools to study is highly beneficial, such issue regarded as thoroughly constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that music practices can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
To begin with, there are various reasons to agree that the music is an important subject in schools. At first, learning music note is exhausting and boring for children. However, the music practices could enhance the concentration. The music can help to kids to better saving their lessons in the mind. For example, it is a suggestion from psychologists to do things such as music and Chess to increase the ability of students to save their lessons.
In addition, learning music needs to a long time practice and a lot interesting that is hard for the kids. But, the music also make the kids personality. The music can produce gentleman people for the society. For instance, a recent scientific research conducted by Tehran University researchers has shown that a significant number of musicians in around the world a high-level personality.
In conclusion, while there are several compelling arguments on the importance of music in children's lives, I profoundly believe that despite all difficulties with learning music in early age, the benefits of the music is far outweighed its drawback for children.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 10.5418719212 85% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 6.10837438424 82% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 8.36945812808 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 5.94088669951 118% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 20.9802955665 76% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.75862068966 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1288.0 1207.87684729 107% => OK
No of words: 250.0 242.827586207 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.152 5.00649968141 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 3.92707691288 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99860234109 2.71678728327 110% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 139.433497537 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588 0.580463131201 101% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 379.143842365 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.6157635468 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 1.56157635468 448% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.71428571429 117% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.5024630542 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.6729519687 50.4703680194 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.0769230769 104.977214359 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.9669160288 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.25397266985 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.33497536946 112% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 2.91625615764 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25301108108 0.242375264174 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900046181238 0.0925447433944 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0611091463133 0.071462118173 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154479326061 0.151781067708 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0519111236725 0.0609392437508 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 12.6369458128 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 53.1260098522 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.9458128079 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 11.5310837438 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32886699507 108% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 55.0591133005 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.3980295567 92% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 72.0 Out of 90
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