A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this new influence on your community. Do you support or oppose the factory? Explain your position.

It is very controversial about the issue, large factory will be built near my living place. Some of people will agree with it because of the opportunities for work. The other of them disagrees with it because the pollution the factory will produce. As my point of view, I totally disagree following the two reasons, pollution problem and the labors from another country.

The first reason I bring into the topic to explain why I disagree with it, it’s the pollution producing. What would supposed or provide the factory to have manufactures? The answer is energy. And where is the energy from? The answer is the oil, coal and fire burning, and these energy suppliers is the murderer to provide toxic gases and somehow it is going to poison the source of the drinking water, it is extremely serious problem to our wealth. Besides the noise making by factory will weaken our spirit. We can get ill not only the physical bout also the mental part.

And the second I want to drop in is, when the factory build up, lots of the people will move in along with it, these people don’t like us having a family. They move here just because job for them. This kind of people is very difficult to get close to, enigmatical. And some of them come from another country, have different habit, and some of these we are not accept. For insistence, I’m an engineer and live near by the company. Lots of the night, I can hear a very laud laughing from the outside of the window in the middle of the night. A group of the outsiders just get off the office and drink the beer. For the security, it is not acceptable.

Making a conclusion, as the above-mention, I don’t agree with the factory built near my home.

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Sentence: The other of them disagrees with it because the pollution the factory will produce.
Description: The fragment them disagrees with is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace disagrees with verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive

Sentence: What would supposed or provide the factory to have manufactures?
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to would and supposed

Sentence: And the second I want to drop in is, when the factory build up, lots of the people will move in along with it, these people don't like us having a family.
Description: The fragment factory build up is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace build with verb, past tense

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