Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
I think there is too much violence in movies.
Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies have been around for many years and undoubtedly now movie is one of the seven arts dominating the world. Different kinds and genres of movies such as documentary, comedy, action, science fiction and many more are created across the world. Some people are of the opinion that many of these films include lots of violence scenes and I agree them due to following reasons.
Firstly, an almost wide range of spectators of movies are children and teenagers who are in the crucial stage of their life; the most formative years of their growth. Hence violence scenes seen in these movies can easily affect them and harm their mentality and cause many major problems in their future life. Unfortunately not only movies, but also some games contain violence. For instance my cousin who is about 5 years, sometimes has nightmare and wakes up and he talks about some similar scenes which he has seen in movies and games and I deeply surmise that violence of movies and games had undesirable impacts on him although he’s not allowed to watch or play these movies and games.
Secondly, children or adolescents might want to experience some of the violence actions they watched in the movies. As a result they might jeopardize and hurt themselves or others since mostly they can’t distinguish right from wrong and they’re apt to take risks and perform inappropriate actions without anticipating the consequences of their experiment.
Moreover, I surmise that usually these violent movies change our mood in an unfavorable way and make us angry; maybe they persuade us to act in an angrily and aggressive way and surely they have effects on our common relations and manners. I acclaim that too much violence scenes alter the image of violence and aggression in our mind and makes them like normal and usual behavior.
To put it in a nutshell, I genuinely and deeply assume that compared to past, now there are too much violence in movies and as it has bad effects on people’s personality and characteristic, this issue should be taken into consideration.
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Sentence: Moreover, I surmise that usually these violent movies change our mood in an unfavorable way and make us angry; maybe they persuade us to act in an angrily and aggressive way and surely they have effects on our common relations and manners.
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Sentence: To put it in a nutshell, I genuinely and deeply assume that compared to past, now there are too much violence in movies and as it has bad effects on people's personality and characteristic, this issue should be taken into consideration.
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The essay is out of topic. You are asked to write: there is too much violence in movies or there is less violence in movies.
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