Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Universities should give the same amount of money to their students’ sports activities as they give to their university libraries. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
Sport is the source of our health, as the university is the source of our knowledge. Both are important in our life and we can’t neglect one of them. Without sports, our health becomes susceptible to many harmful diseases and also without university we will sink in the world of nescience. So I strongly agree that the university should give the same amount of money for both sports and libraries.
First of all, the university plays the basic role on creation the generation of future, so it must be furnished with necessary tools that assist the students to build up their knowledge. So spending money to develop the education system in any university will benefit the students to improve their skills in different regions, since the college is an important stage with respect to the students, it’s the place where the students prepare their selves for future life. Libraries are the essential component in the education system where the students can build up their knowledge in effective way, so spending money to develop it will facilitate the successful path for their students to be ready for future career.
Second, sport is no less important than the education, after a long day from attending classes and making experiment the body need to restores activity to be able to receive a new information, as the aphorism said “a sound mind in a sound body”, so the sports is complementary to education. Sport is not only the way to improve our health, but it’s a good teacher that teach the students a new skills, it’s an effective way to teach the students to work as one team, which help them to build up a new friendship and improve their personality . In addition, the variety of the sports such as football, basketball, volleyball and etc… can create new atmosphere filled with fun, challenge and competitive between the students, that help them to work hard with each other to win their game and also it’s an effective way to relief a stress and be ready to back to the class.
To sum up, sports and libraries are the basic element in education system, if we lose one of them the other component will impact in bad way. So spending cares and money on both will creates a healthy and smart generation of students.
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Sentence: Second, sport is no less important than the education, after a long day from attending classes and making experiment the body need to restores activity to be able to receive a new information, as the aphorism said a sound mind in a sound body, so the sports is complementary to education.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to restores and activity
Sentence: Sport is not only the way to improve our health, but it's a good teacher that teach the students a new skills, it's an effective way to teach the students to work as one team, which help them to build up a new friendship and improve their personality .
Description: The fragment that teach the is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace teach with verb, past tense
Sentence: So spending cares and money on both will creates a healthy and smart generation of students.
Description: The word will is not usually used as a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: will create a
Sentence: Without sports, our health becomes susceptible to many harmful diseases and also without university we will sink in the world of nescience.
Error: nescience Suggestion: ?
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