If you could invent something new,what product would you develop?Use spesific details to explain why this invention is needed.

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If you could invent something new,what product would you develop?
Use spesific details to explain why this invention is needed.

Many things have invented by inventor from past to present and technology continue to develop dy by day. People benefit from technology to facilitate their lives. Technological tools such as televisions,computers,ipads are useful for humanity.One of the most important inventions is computers. If you could invent something new,i would develop computers.

First of all,most people need to use computers in everywhere.Business and educational life is excellent example of this situation. In business life,many transactions such as employee's wages,payments do on the computer. Also,when companies meet problems about other companies,they solve on the internet by using e-mails.Moreover,in educational life,students and professors have to use the computers.Because professors take advantage of computers to follow advances in about their depatments. Also,they benefit from the computers to observe given assigments by themselves. For the students, they use the computers to research about their tasks. They prefer to use google to find information about their homeworks instead of looking books. The main reason to use the computers is convenience. People can do everything easily and rapidly. Therefore,i would develop computers to gain time to people. Because time is very important at this time.

As i second above there is also fact that people need to enjoy to get rid of hard conditions of lives. One of the most important tools is computer for people to spend enjoyable time. People can get rid of stress through the computers and they can be relax. Also,they can miss their problems while they deal with computers by surfing on the internet or playing games. Thus,people can be comfortable in their lives. Computer is a case in point.

In brief,when everything is taken into consideration, we see that computers are beneficial for people in many ways. I know importance of time and i think people. Hence,i would develop computers.

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Sentence: Many things have invented by inventor from past to present and technology continue to develop dy by day.
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Sentence: Technological tools such as televisions,computers,ipads are useful for humanity.One of the most important inventions is computers.
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Suggestion: Refer to is and computers

Sentence: Also,when companies meet problems about other companies,they solve on the internet by using e-mails.Moreover,in educational life,students and professors have to use the computers.Because professors take advantage of computers to follow advances in about their depatments.
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