It has recently been announced that a new restaurant may be built in your neighborhood. Do you support or oppose this plan? Why? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.
Addition of a new business to a neighborhood is always very beneficial for the community. It may provide additional opportunities, entertainment or even fulfill basic needs of dewllers, right on the spot. If a potential business to be established is managed properly, it can greatly increase the value of properties owned in a given neighborhood, what is always desirable. In my opinion, a new restaurant build in my neighborhood would be an excellent idea, provided that the restaurant is not connected to a bar, as it may decrease the safety of all inhabitants.
First of all, the restaurant woul...
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Sentence: In my opinion, a new restaurant build in my neighborhood would be an excellent idea, provided that the restaurant is not connected to a bar, as it may decrease the safety of all inhabitants.
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Sentence: Furthermore, people with smaller apartaments and kitchens may throw a party in a restaurant that is near their home, inviting people for a chat at their small home afterwards.
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Sentence: I would strongly recommend to locate this new building in a way, so that none of inhabitants would be affected by loud music that would accompain the parties.
Error: accompain Suggestion: accompany
Sentence: Moreover, if the restaurant is connected to a bar, that may cause occurence of drunk people wandering around in a neighborhood, and greatly diminish people's safety.
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Sentence: To recapitulate, after weighing all pros and cons, my optimism for building a new resturant is qualified.
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Sentence: I would strongly recommend this idea if I could get assurance that noise would not influence inhabitants of my neighborhood, and the bar accompaining the restaurant will be managed properly.
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