Life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when your grandparents were children.
Although some people believe that life today is easier and more comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children, but it seems to me that the world today is more complex than before and proportionally our needs and businesses are completely different toward our past. On the other hand, comparing our life today with our ancestor's is not practical.
First, for having a better illustration about the issue, you can imagine our grandparent's life in fifty years ago. When a man and a woman got married, the husband's and wife's duties were completely determined; the man had to work out of the house and earn money while the woman was working at home and taking care of children. So the work division system was pretty determining for preceding a family.
But today the situation is completely different. The industrialization has made serious changes in our society that it is really influential on people's life too. The type of needs has changed and people are looking forward to comforting, also the cost and expenses are not comparable with the past; so for achieving to a comfortable life, in a family, both the man and the woman should work; in this way the face of life is completely different with our grandparent's, working and its involved problems are the main part of the people's life; sometimes even parents do not have extra time to investigate to their children so it is obvious that the work division system is not comparable with fifty years ago; on the other hand, our today's life style makes us to be more busy and confused than our grandparent's.
To sum up, to put the issues into a nutshell, the new and different life style that we have because of industrialization, our Life today is not easier and more comfortable than it was when our grandparents were children.
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'On the other hand' means However. It doesn't mean 'On another hand'.
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