Many people visit museums when they travel to new places. Why
do you think people visit museums? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer
About 196 countries in the world, every country has own culture, language and knowledge. Now, traveling around the world is one of the hobbies and may be habits of many people to explore new countries that never heard about of it before. Many questions may be asked by people such as, how can we know its culture? What about its history ? and What characterized this country? And many question, and the answers of all these questions can only found in only one place which is the museum.
The first place that the person thinks to visit it when he decided to travel to the new country is the museum. Museum summarizes a long path for the person who wants to know everything about his destination; It’s the mirror of any culture. Museum is the place that gathers history, art, invention, craft, and life style of any country, that place will provide the younger and older a good background of any civilizations. We was read many books about specific places, may be something still not clear on our mind till we visit the museum, all the abstractions are removed after we saw everything on a real world. Museum is a good teacher for us to learn new information about any country all over the world. For example, I read many book about Egyptian civilization, with respect to me what I read is so wear and unknown, I sat for many hours to imagine how the ancient Egyptians look like? What about their language? And many question, but after I visit one of the museum in Egypt all things become clear and I was so interested for what I have seen their.
Second, museum is the place where we can build up new social relationships between many people from different cultures, since it the place where all people from different countries gather to recognize new one, so we can interchanged the information between us, learn a new language that will open a chance to have a new friends. For instance, in my last visiting for one of the famous museum on London, I meet a person from south korea, at the beginning I faced a difficulties to connect with him, but after a long conservation about history of London, he become a best friend and he learn me his language.
To sum up, all you need to know about a new culture just visit its museum and you find all the answers for your question. Museum is the only place that reflects the history of any cultures.
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Sentence: Second, museum is the place where we can build up new social relationships between many people from different cultures, since it the place where all people from different countries gather to recognize new one, so we can interchanged the information between us, learn a new language that will open a chance to have a new friends.
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Sentence: For instance, in my last visiting for one of the famous museum on London, I meet a person from south korea, at the beginning I faced a difficulties to connect with him, but after a long conservation about history of London, he become a best friend and he learn me his language.
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