People listen to music for different reasons and at different times. Why is music important to many people?
It is impossible to disregard the impact of music on our morality and spirits. As we all know that the types of music vary from classic, jazz to rock and pop. A gazillion people have used to these music at different times for different reasons. From my vantage point, some people listen to the music to elevate their spirits, others use it to flee from hard situations and even it may be used for moving body such as dancing and sport. Through the following paragraphs I will substantiate my claims.
First and foremost, people listen to music to feed their morals. Notes in very good arrangement could make us feel better, pacify, and after a hard day’s work help us to be far from our mind’s occupation. Besides, it could be utilized for refreshing between works, which are related to our brain. For instance, when I have to study hard for my exams, during this time, I am used to listening to classical music through my study, in my break time, and improve my brain activity. In this way, my brain ability can be enhanced and thus spreading the amount of time of working which is more than times I don't listen.
The other equally imperative facet, people listen to music to be far from difficulties or bad happenings. If an unexpected and unendurable event abruptly happens, to overcome the situation they supposed to use music to be calm down. For example, when I lost my uncle last year, to take over of thought of that sorrowful event, I was trying to listen to calm music especially Celine Dion to hinder myself from crying and loosing my health.
Last but not least, the other aspect of using music is in dance and sport. Music would be used for obesity as well as dancing. It would stimulate people to do exercises and thus help them to retain their health. Inciting obese people to sport distinctly is equivalent to losing their weights. Therefore, listening to the music can help them in these competitive conditions. In a word, people loosing their way in this way are music inventors’ debtor.
To wrap up, taking all aforementioned explanations, it could be concluded that the scope of listening and using music in life is very wide and indeed it has much influence on our spirits. Listening to music for refreshing and being relaxed, in hard situation for overcoming bad events and finally for loosing weights and dancing are examples of doing this paramount behavior.
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