Referring to the main points in the lecture, summarize the professor's views on effective discipline and contrast them with the options that parents tend to use, as outlined in the reading passage.
The reading passage quotes about the three strategies adopted by parents, in general, in order to discipline their children. But the Professor feels that the management technique of enforcing technique to be far more beneficial. The advantages and disadvantages of each of the three techniques is mentioned in the reading. Whereas, only management technique is emphasized in the lecture and recommended.
Firstly, parents can use power to discipline their children. It can either involve physically punishing the children or taking away their privileges such as playing with a ...
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- Educators should teach facts only after their students have studied the ideas, trends, and concepts that help explain those facts. 78
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