Some people think that the automobile has improved modern life. Others think that the automobile has caused serious problems. What is your opinion? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without a doubt, the invention of the automobile had a great impact on modern life. Some people think that it has improved their life. Others however disagree and think that it has really caused serious problems.
First of all, some people has touted the invention of the automobile, as according to them, it has definitely facilitated the methods of transportation. Before that, people were more relying on animals. Therefore, it had taken them a lot more time in order to go from one place to another. Moreover, travelling with a car is much more convenient, and it is supplemented with comfortable seats, on which the driver and the passengers can sit. In addition to this, an automobile can protect the passengers from bad weather conditions. People today can adjust the air condition to provide a suitable atmosphere during either a cold or bad weather. Unlike before, when they had to struggle with all types of weather obstacles.
On the other hand, there are some people who deem such an invention to be a serious problem. They think that automobiles have contributed actually in increasing the level of pollution. Exhaust fumes released from the cars and the combustion processes that take place while driving an automobile are major causes of pollution, and thus has a great effect on the global warming as a whole. In addition to this, the number of people being killed as a result of automobil's accidents has dramatically increased with such an invention.
I personally think that inspite of all the disadvantages, the advantages of the automobile still exceed. People became able to travel long distances within days. Unlike before, when it used to take them months to reach a particular destination. Though, social communication and business opportunities today have expanded to a greater extent as a result of this invention.
In conclusion, automobile invention has affected our lives in both ways, positively and negatively. It obviously abstracts travelling time, it is more satisfying and it can accomodate almost all weather conditions while driving. Controversially, it increases pollution, and the percentage of death as a result of road accidents.
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Sentence: I personally think that inspite of all the disadvantages, the advantages of the automobile still exceed.
Error: inspite Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It obviously abstracts travelling time, it is more satisfying and it can accomodate almost all weather conditions while driving.
Error: accomodate Suggestion: accommodate
flaws:
It is better to support only one side for this kind of topics. It is not the essay type to compare and contrast and then make your opinion.
like this:
para 1: my opinion is A
para 2: reason 1
para 3: reason 2
para 4: reason 3 (optional)
para 5: conclusion: because of reasons 1,2,3, so i support A.
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Category: Very Good Excellent
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