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What is your ideal job?
Everyone at a certain stage of life would start to dream of an ideal job,a job that is totally suitable and falls under certain criteria that corresponds with one's own legacy,satisfaction and dreams.For me personally,this ideal job would be working as a pharmacist.This has been an overwhelming dream since I was a child, for the following reasons.
First of all,a pharmacist has a variety of distinct working atmospheres to choose from.A pharmacist can work in a community or a retail pharmacy,can also work in a hospital as well as in manufacturing.In a community or a retail pharmacy, a phar...
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Sentence: In a community or a retail pharmacy, a pharmacist would be involved in the sale business, but at the same time he\she would becommunicating with customers or patients through pharmacist-patient counseling section.In a hospital,a pharmacist has the opportunity to be more indulged clinically,dealing
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Sentence: Secondly,working as a pharmacist always involve team work.A pharmacist wheather working in a pharmacy, in a hospital or in a company,he is never alone and that is a bonus, especially for a social person like me who always like to be around people.In a pharmacy ,a pharmacist would always be working with technicians who are considered to be his right hand,working togother as a team would make the job more enjoyable.In a hospital,a pharmacist would be working directly with doctors and nurses ,
Error: wheather Suggestion: whether
Error: togother Suggestion: together
Sentence: For example,here in the United States, a pharmacist can earn a six-figure salary per year which is considerd to be a very high salary.Meanwhile, the benefits and the amenities that are offered to a pharmacist are tempting as well.For example; best health care insurances, longer paid vacations,and an overtime pay are some of the benefits that could be available.
Error: considerd Suggestion: considered
Sentence: Various working routines,team work and a seductive salary,is exactly what I'm looking for.I hope that I would be able to make my dream come true oneday.
Error: oneday Suggestion: one day.
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Score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2139 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.861 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.137 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 68 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.882 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.991 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.588 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.621 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.16 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5