The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The pie charts contain information, which is reported as per statistics and prognostications, on the ages of people in Yemen and Italy in 2000 and 2050.

It can be clearly seen that in Yemen, in 2000, the population in the 15-59 age group constituted 46.3% of people, and this figure will rise by 11% in 2050, whereas the amount of the folks in the aforementioned age bracket, in Italy, in 2000, was 61.6%, and this per cent, in 2050, will shrink by 15%, approximately. Furthermore, the old who were older than 60, in 2000, made up only a tiny 3.6% of Yemenis, and this amount, in 2050, will not change considerably. By contrast, the elderly who were over 60, comprised a bigger proportion (24.1%) of Italians in 2000, and this amount, in 2050, will increase by 18%. Turning to the the 0-14 age bracket, in 2000, they accounted for more than half of Yemenis, and it is anticipated that this amount, in 2050, will plunge to 37%. However, the above-mentioned young people, in 2000, comprised a smaller proportion (14.3%) of Italians compared to Yemenis and this amount will not change dramatically in 2050.

Overall, in Italy and Yemen, in 2050, the population in different age groups will undergo transformations in comparison with the year 2000.

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