diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School

Essay topics:

diagram shows the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School

The diagram shows the West Park Secondary School and its development in 3 different stages : 1950,1980 and 2010.

In 1950, the school was built very close to the main road and adjacent to the number of houses. The large area behind the school is turned into playground which is next to farmland.

In 1980, the sequence of houses had been replaced with car park and science block buildings.The farmland had also been replaced with the sports field area.

In 2010,the car parking had been extended and the sports field area is replaced with the extension of car park. However, the playground area had been reduced to quarter and sports field area had been built in rest of the playground area.

During this period,the car parking area had been built. In addition to this,a new science block and sports fiels is also build.

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 93, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...th car park and science block buildings.The farmland had also been replaced with th...
^^^
Line 17, column 19, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...playground area. During this period,the car parking area had been built. In add...
^^^^
Line 17, column 76, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , a
...area had been built. In addition to this,a new science block and sports fiels is a...
^^
Line 17, column 122, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'builded', 'built'.
Suggestion: builded; built
... science block and sports fiels is also build.
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, second, so, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 698.0 965.302439024 72% => OK
No of words: 142.0 196.424390244 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91549295775 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 3.73543355544 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.31632207147 2.65546596893 87% => OK
Unique words: 73.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.514084507042 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 180.9 283.868780488 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.33902439024 207% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.6244725691 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.25 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.23603664747 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126433219803 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0740160243048 0.103423049105 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102802089542 0.0843802449381 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101777360203 0.15604864568 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118973501351 0.0819641961636 145% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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