The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children s activities The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate

Essay topics:

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate.

The pie charts depict information about the participation of both gender in various cultural and leisure activities through a survey.

Overall, girls are actively participating in dancing and boys give more preference to computer games. While, both genders give less preference to listening activity.

It is vivid that, computer games are the popular sources of entertainment among boys with 34% and this proportion is almost double from girls’ interest in this activity which is only 16%. However in reading, girls prefer to pursue this activity in free time with 20%, where showed only insignificant interest in it. In contrast, both gender showed least interest in listening to music with equal proportion of 10%.

Furthermore, there are activities which are varied in terms of interest among both sexes. Girls are more fascinated towards dancing with 27%. In contrast, Almost Same proportion of boys give priority basketball. Besides this, 17% and 11% of boys prefer to go for soccer and skateboarding in their free time. Whereas, 15% and 11% girls choose to netball and gymnastics in their spare time respectively.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, however, if, so, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 955.0 965.302439024 99% => OK
No of words: 178.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36516853933 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65262427087 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80688123185 2.65546596893 106% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578651685393 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 287.1 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.511743837 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.8181818182 112.824112599 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1818181818 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.23603664747 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232073842166 0.215688989381 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881306999747 0.103423049105 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0739770371139 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152766319057 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0514865001526 0.0819641961636 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.57 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 40.7170731707 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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