As an international student in London, you have an account with a local bank. The monthly bank transfer you receive from your parents has been delayed this month due to an error at your parents’ bank.
Write a letter to your bank. In your letter:
introduce yourself and ask for a loan
say why you need the money
tell how you intend to pay back the money
Dear Sir,
My name is John, pursuing my post graduation at Standford university. My university enrollment number is 07654 and I am writing this letter to request you for an urgent loan to pay the term fee at the college. There was an issue with the overseas bank while my parents are transferring money to your bank account.
The college fee has to be paid within 5 days else, I won't be allowed to attend the classes and management will prohibit me to write the exams.
If you could lend me the money as a loan for 6000 dollars, I could pay the loan immediately after recieving money from my parents which wont take more than 10 days as per the abroad's bank's officials. Please let me know the interest I have to pay along with amount. For your reference I am attaching you my account number and the fee last date notification advertisement published by the University in the last month. I hope you can understand the situation and grant me the loan I required.
Account Number : 000-876-2145
Branch : City Center
Thanks,
John.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 32.9175257732 73% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 26.3917525773 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 870.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72826086957 4.54256449028 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65031951817 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 127.690721649 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630434782609 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 253.8 290.88556701 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3148108562 44.8134815571 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6666666667 76.5299724578 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.77777777778 4.34317383033 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268240518933 0.216113520407 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103488479946 0.0766984524023 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122542031188 0.0603063233224 203% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104653677203 0.12726935374 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122237335219 0.0580467560999 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 8.37731958763 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 70.7449484536 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 7.45979381443 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 41.2886597938 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 8.15463917526 135% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.