You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work.Write a letter to the accommodation officer a

Dear Sir,
Allow me to introduce myself. I am Preeti Singh, the student of the 1st year in the Department of Architecture. I have recently moved here to Canada from India. I would like to thank you for your kind support for helping me in setting down here. I have moved into the college accommodation in last Monday.
I a, sharing my room with one of the students from a different department. Since, I've moved here, encountered two problems because of which I want to change my room. The first issue is my roommate smokes cigarette which is allowed in here, but I am having symptoms of Asthma and doctors have strictly asked to stay away from any kind of smoke which may result in breathing problem. Another problem is in the room, there is not a single window and light is also dimmed. Being a student in the architecture department, I need to make a lot of drawings and require sufficient natural or LED lights.
I request you to allow me to shift from room number 1103 to any other available room. Hoping for your positive response.
Yours sincerely, Preeti

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 162, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cently moved here to Canada from India. I would like to thank you for your kind s...
^
Line 2, column 247, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...rt for helping me in setting down here. I have moved into the college accommodati...
^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... college accommodation in last Monday. I a, sharing my room with one of the stud...
^
Line 3, column 3, Rule ID: I_A[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am' (first person of "to be")?
Suggestion: am
...ollege accommodation in last Monday. I a, sharing my room with one of the studen...
^
Line 3, column 3, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'a'?
...ollege accommodation in last Monday. I a, sharing my room with one of the student...
^^
Line 3, column 82, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I've
...nts from a different department. Since, Ive moved here, encountered two problems be...
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 4.92783505155 61% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 32.9175257732 64% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.85567010309 104% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 874.0 937.175257732 93% => OK
No of words: 191.0 206.0 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.57591623037 4.54256449028 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71756304063 3.78020617076 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58218706341 2.54303337028 102% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 127.690721649 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633507853403 0.622605031667 102% => OK
syllable_count: 276.3 290.88556701 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.13402061856 88% => OK
Article: 2.0 0.824742268041 243% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6804123711 103% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2172368486 44.8134815571 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.2307692308 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6923076923 16.8248392259 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 4.34317383033 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.49484536082 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.94845360825 76% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158324431727 0.216113520407 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502534772163 0.0766984524023 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0477351485579 0.0603063233224 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0788820704116 0.12726935374 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478999738136 0.0580467560999 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 8.37731958763 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 70.7449484536 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 7.45979381443 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.69 8.71597938144 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 41.2886597938 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.