Your cousin is moving to your city. She wants to attend the same school as you. Write a letter to her, describing your school, teachers, and timetable and mentioning extra activities the school offer.
Dear Sara,
Hi. How are you? I have heard that you want to join my school this coming year. I write this letter to tell you everything relating to my study and especially my school. I really hope you will enjoy and be able to get acquainted with it.
First of all, you might be attracted by the school’s location and design which infamous throughout the country. The college besides the river and surrounded by Green Park. As I can imagine, it looks like a fairy castle. Although it was built over thirty years ago, its architecture is still a symbol of the academic building. In addition, the facilities and accommodations are very modern and well-organized which can accommodate a thousand students each year. It not only has a lot of classrooms but also a huge library that contains a variety of books, references, and other resources. Moreover, teachers are highly respected, helpful, and punctual. You may access lecturers during the time of the classes or maybe out of this time. They welcome you to ask and give you advice when you have any difficulties in studying. Thus, do not worry about class and lecture.
Besides, I will show you my timeline fulfilled with classes and many extra activities the school offer. To be sure that you are interested in kinds of social activities. You should spend only one-third semester to pay attention to lectures in class, half time remains you have to do research at the library or on the internet. However, after a heavy time of studying, you could associate with your classmates to join in available social clubs or to make a new project for your group as well. I recommend you to take part in some sporty clubs as you are suitable and active. Furthermore, the school has just been refurbished last month with many new hi-end facilities and gymnastic tutors.
That is all things for now. I will pick you up and let you go around here when you arrive. I am eager to see you soon.
Looking forwards to your reply.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g to my study and especially my school. I really hope you will enjoy and be able ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, still, third, thus, well, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 5.05154639175 356% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 32.9175257732 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 26.3917525773 171% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 937.175257732 173% => OK
No of words: 347.0 206.0 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67146974063 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63411926934 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 127.690721649 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616714697406 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 290.88556701 173% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 12.6804123711 189% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9131645462 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.5416666667 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4583333333 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 4.34317383033 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 7.41237113402 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226645170198 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580092014285 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585291898149 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13300545249 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531128360453 0.0580467560999 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 41.2886597938 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 171, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...g to my study and especially my school. I really hope you will enjoy and be able ...
^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, still, third, thus, well, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.48453608247 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 4.92783505155 183% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 5.05154639175 356% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.03092783505 264% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 32.9175257732 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 26.3917525773 171% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1621.0 937.175257732 173% => OK
No of words: 347.0 206.0 168% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67146974063 4.54256449028 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 3.78020617076 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63411926934 2.54303337028 104% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 127.690721649 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616714697406 0.622605031667 99% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 290.88556701 173% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.13402061856 175% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.463917525773 431% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 12.6804123711 189% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 16.3608247423 86% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.9131645462 44.8134815571 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 67.5416666667 76.5299724578 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.4583333333 16.8248392259 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.70833333333 4.34317383033 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 7.41237113402 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.94845360825 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226645170198 0.216113520407 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0580092014285 0.0766984524023 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585291898149 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13300545249 0.12726935374 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0531128360453 0.0580467560999 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.8 8.37731958763 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 7.45979381443 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.21 8.71597938144 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 41.2886597938 182% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 8.62886597938 64% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 8.54432989691 89% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 8.15463917526 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.