Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture Do you think it is important for children to be taught art do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather that other subjects | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather that other subjects?

It is commonly believed that art plays a fundamental role in society as artists are able to express their thoughts and their culture in their work.In my opinion children should definitely learn art because they can develop creativity and learn to express themselves in their art work but is should not be taught to the detriment of other subjects.

Firstly, art is an essential subjects which children, especially young children, should learn in order to help promote their creativity and imagination.without the development of imagination and creative thinking ,children will struggle to grow into dynamic, individuals thinkers when they reach adulthood. Furthermore, some children are particularly gifted in their creative abilities and studying art can help them nurture their talents.

Another important advantage for children when practicing art is that it provides a medium through which they can express their emotions and feelings.In other words, young children do not have the linguistic capabilities to put their ideas into language and thus communicate directly .Therefore, by using art, they are able to convey meaning through pictures and symbols.For this reason, many child psychologists often study the art work of children to gain an insight into what they think and feel.

Finally, however, regardless of how useful the study of art is for children this should not result un more focus being placed an art rather than other subjects .Children need to have a balance of all subjects so as to facilitate a healthy development both mentally and physically.Thus ,ensuring that there is a healthy balance of art, science, languages and physical education in the school syllabus is essential.

In conclusion, while art certainly helps a child develop creativity as well as express their thoughts, it should be taught equally alongside all other subjects. A school curriculum should offer a balance of subjects.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1633.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42524916944 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9549921617 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544850498339 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 20.2975951904 212% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 149.74454438 49.4020404114 303% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 233.285714286 106.682146367 219% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 43.0 20.7667163134 207% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.8571428571 7.06120827912 310% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395285758989 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.181220586907 0.084324248473 215% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0831326648911 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224593242517 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039752472973 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.6 13.0946893788 195% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 50.2224549098 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 11.3001002004 178% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.0 9.78957915832 306% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 10.1190380762 190% => OK
text_standard: 30.0 10.7795591182 278% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, as to, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments