Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Essay topics:

Financial education should be a mandatory component of the school program. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In many countries the discussion about the rising financial problems of young people has been getting more emphasis. {tooltip}Tough{end-link}Inappropriate choice of word or bad spelling?{end-tooltip} some people are voting to integrate financial education as a {tooltip}schooling subject{end-link}mandatory subject at school{end-tooltip}.
The key problem for many young people is that they don’t know how to use and spend money in the right way. The “get what you want mentality” is widely advertised by the mass media and it looks like some people think that living {tooltip}with interest fees{end-link}in debt{end-tooltip} is normal. Though financial problems in young life are very common with the result that {tooltip}it is difficult to learn how to spend money appropriated{end-link}Confusing sentence, try re-writing it to make it easier to understand{end-tooltip}. The main idea of teaching a financial subject must be to explain about a balanced budget and that debt could ruins one’s future.
{tooltip}But{end-link}"However" sounds much better than "but"{end-tooltip} this is just one side that has to be considered. For me, the main question is why the parents cannot give the right advice to their kids? To leave such a personal subject in the hands of government and school means to ignore a key task of any parent: to be a good role model.
Moreover it should be {tooltip}considerate{end-link}considered{end-tooltip} that the social effects of talking about money and finance in a socially diverse school class can be harmful for some students. In my opinion it is more important to teach parents about their responsibilities as a role model and have them educate the children about this private topic in a safe and private environment.
All in all I think the main task of public institutions should be to educate about common subjects and not to give such personal advice like the use of money.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, moreover, so, as to, i think, talking about, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25589225589 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.71990946684 2.80592935109 168% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558922558923 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 297.0 20.2975951904 1463% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1561.0 106.682146367 1463% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 297.0 20.7667163134 1430% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 82.0 7.06120827912 1161% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.67935871743 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163075597276 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163075597276 0.084324248473 193% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0866292286614 0.151304729494 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0145254009473 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 151.8 13.0946893788 1159% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -229.98 50.2224549098 -458% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 119.1 11.3001002004 1054% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.71 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 21.72 8.58950901804 253% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 61.0 9.78957915832 623% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 120.8 10.1190380762 1194% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 61.0 10.7795591182 566% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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