Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achievements, this sats a bad example to young people.
What extent do you agree or disagree?
Celebrities, without doubt, are the well renowned people of the world. Now, a controversial thought is raised that name and fame make celebrities more popular rather than their achievements, which put a bad impact on adults or not. Here, I, disagree with large extent with the given statement.
First and the most important reason is that youngester make celebrities as their role model, not only they try to copy them but also do hardwork to live a aristocratic life like celebs.To illustrate, adults are more eager to live a life of king as they want to achieve all the happiness for their parents or family for which they do struggle alot. Besides this, a recent survey by success magazine concluded that 10% younger people become rich as they follow the same path of their ideal which clear the fact that hardwork is the key to success. Apart from it, by following the famous personality adults could inculcate social and moral values, which are known as the wheels to step forward in life. Thence, it not difficult to understand that celebrities play a prominent role in the life of adults
On the other hand, every thing has its drawbacks, there also some adverse impact of this on youngsters. To begin with, adults start spending lavishly on the things which are advertise by celebrities. To be specific, it is indeed a true that famous personality have huge fan following in every corner of the world, when they advertise new products there always have been a long cue to buy it. So, at that stage followers spend astronomical amount of money for the product, which might put a hole in their pocket. What is more, some people are mad, because only to look like their favourite celebrities they diminish their own individuality. To demonstrate it, people start copying thier favourite celebrities like their hair style, dressing sense, way of walking and talking even the way of eating also. Hence, it put a huge negative impact on the teenagers.
In conclusion, after having all points into my knowledge, I, would like to reiterate that famous celebrities play a crucial role to some limit. However, it also depend on their fans how they follow them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...wledge, I, would like to reiterate that famous celebrities play a crucial role to some limit. Howe...
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Message: Did you mean 'depends'?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, hence, however, if, look, so, then, well, apart from, in conclusion, to begin with, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 37.0 24.0651302605 154% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 370.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87027027027 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59257241017 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578378378378 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.8109898472 49.4020404114 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.133333333 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6666666667 20.7667163134 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46666666667 7.06120827912 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2272528814 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0684587214922 0.084324248473 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613828784636 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135723474519 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0333710501046 0.056905535591 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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