Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational,otherwise they are a complete waste of time.Do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience

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Some people believe that children's leisure activities must be educational,otherwise they are a complete waste of time.

Do you agree or disagree?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience

Even though spare activities plays bad role in children life, without it children seems like lifeless. It is frequently believed that, apart from educational spare activities others are totally losing the time. I strongly disagree with this statement, following paragraph will intend to analyse my notion.

To embark on, due to knowledge to vocational activities younger are able to manage life with tricks and ideas even I will effect on their main subject such as maths, science at some extent. For example, those child’s who has knowledge about plumbers and electricians then it may enhance their grades in science subject at school or college. In addition to this, vocational skills also beneficial for gain money through part time work, and children will also deposit their school and college fees with the help of earning money through vocational skills.

Moreover, both outdoor and indoor leisure activities is being proved a paramount for youth as it has give more IQ level and improve our physiological fitness. Since outdoor activities becomes as splendid for children health and mind, it would defiantly leads to less attention about academic studies because of those outdoor activities children tend to give more growth of sports sector on country. Take, in cricket more personality and money is being given to India by Indian cricketers and cricket is being developed sport as outdoor sports in India as an example.

In conclusion, there are various leisure activities should be learnt rather than educational activities, which I have mentioned above.

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
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... school or college. In addition to this, vocational skills also beneficial for ga...
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Suggestion: part-time
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, moreover, so, then, apart from, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1336.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36546184739 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63251097442 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.646586345382 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 407.7 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8231382601 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.6 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9 20.7667163134 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162519967302 0.244688304435 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635300773866 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.03431797177 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0916398447929 0.151304729494 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.028613685652 0.056905535591 50% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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