Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Experts throughout both the developing and developed world have debated whether the advent of sophisticated modern technology such as mobile phones, laptops and iPad have helped to enhance and improve people's social lives or whether the opposite has become the case.
Personally, I strongly advocate the former view. This essay will discuss both sides using examples from the UK government and Oxford University to demonstrate points and prove arguments.
On the one hand there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that such technology can be detrimental especially to the younger generation who are more easily affected by it’s addictive nature and which can result in people feeling more isolated from the society.
The central reason behind this is twofold, firstly, the invention of online social media sites and apps, such as Twitter and Facebook have reduced crucial face-to-face interactions dramatically. Through use of these appealing and attractive mediums, people feel in touch and connected yet lack key social skills and the ability to communicate.
Secondly, dependence on such devices is built up frighteningly easily which may have a damaging effect on mental health and encourage a sedentary lifestyle. For example, recent scientific research by the UK government demonstrated that 90% of people in their 30s spend over 20 hours per week on Messenger and similar applications to chat with their friends instead of meeting up and spending quality time together or doing sport. As a result, it is conclusively clear that these technology advancements have decreased and diminished our real life interactions.
On the other hand, although there are significant downsides to technological developments, its’ multifold advantages cannot be denied. This is largely because the popularity of technology such as cellphones allows people to connect freely and easily with no geographical barriers.
People are able to share any type of news, information, photos and opinions with their loved ones whenever and wherever they want therefore keeping a feeling of proximity and closeness. For example, an extensive study by Oxford University illustrated that people who work, or study abroad and use applications like Facetime and WhatsApp to chat with their families, are less likely to experience loneliness and feel out of the loop than those who do not.
Consistent with this line of thinking is that businessmen are also undoubtedly able to benefit from these advances by holding virtual real -time meetings using Skype which may increase the chance of closing business deals without the need to fly.
From the arguments and examples given I firmly believe that overall communication and mans’ sociability has been advanced enormously due to huge the huge technological progress of the past twenty years and despite some potentially serious health implications which governments should not fail to address, it is predicted that its popularity will continue to flourish in the future.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 10.4138276553 278% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2516.0 1615.20841683 156% => OK
No of words: 465.0 315.596192385 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41075268817 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8438321329 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 176.041082164 160% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604301075269 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 806.4 506.74238477 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 465.0 20.2975951904 2291% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2516.0 106.682146367 2358% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 465.0 20.7667163134 2239% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 116.0 7.06120827912 1643% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.38176352705 205% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200952182778 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200952182778 0.084324248473 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0759621016344 0.151304729494 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273157846604 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 236.6 13.0946893788 1807% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -408.96 50.2224549098 -814% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 185.8 11.3001002004 1644% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.58 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 31.83 8.58950901804 371% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 151.0 78.4519038076 192% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 61.0 9.78957915832 623% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 188.0 10.1190380762 1858% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 61.0 10.7795591182 566% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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