Some people think that sending criminals to prison is not effective. Education and job training should be used instead. Do you agree or disagree?
In this day and age, opinions are often divided as to what measures prove effective to deal with criminals. Many hold a firm belief that imprisonment is no longer a justifiable measure, and therefore should be substituted with education opportunities, as well as career training courses. From my perspective, this idea seems partially reasonable, which will be meticulously explained as follows.
On the one hand, I am of the opinion that imprisonment needs to be maintained as a method to address offenders. In particular, sending those individuals who broke the law and violated regulations to prison has long been deemed a severe punishment, allowing for the realisation of dangerous legal acts amongst criminals. As a result, they are likely to think twice and avoid re-offending after serving, for example, a five-year sentence at the expense of either misdemeanours or serious crimes. what is more, if lawbreakers are put in jail, their life in prison can act as real-life examples warning the others who might generate some motives to commit crimes. this is perfectly exemplified through the case of drug trafficking in several countries in which traffickers are given up to 10-year sentences. Recent research has asserted a reduction of drug-related cases and juvenile crimes, closely linked to the verdict of sending offenders to prison.
On the other hand, I side with the idea that more education and employment opportunities are provided so as to assist criminals in their life. this measure, if implemented appropriately, will offer lawbreakers a host of chances to rehabilitate prior to their reintegration into society. By means of job training, criminals might be given potential likelihoods with a view to earning a living, thereby reducing the probability of re-offending. More importantly, various lessons in educational institutions are believed to empower offenders in terms of better understanding of the law in a quest of becoming law-abiding citizens in the long run. these lessons could range from distinguishing from the right and the wrong to mitigating mental issues and eliminating the feeling of guilt before criminals return to the society.
In conclusion, I still highly value the significance of imprisonment on account of its representation as a stringent punishment and a wake-up call for potential offenders. Nevertheless, I also advocate incorporating training sessions and courses concerning education and employment for criminals’ future rehabilitation. It is, therefore, suggested that the governments and authorities thoroughly consider these two methods before making any decisions to best deal with criminal problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in particular, as a result, as well as, what is more, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2265.0 1615.20841683 140% => OK
No of words: 409.0 315.596192385 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53789731051 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32223909632 2.80592935109 118% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 176.041082164 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.61369193154 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 711.0 506.74238477 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.5309277948 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 133.235294118 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.29411764706 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166267619786 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449095623834 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343168962599 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0890899643072 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0142777716775 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 78.4519038076 177% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.