Some people think zoos should be illegal. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the current society, there is no denying that safeguarding animals are a pressing problem. It is universally believed that whether or not zoos may be illegitimate is becoming more controversial. To my mind, despite the drawbacks of keeping zoos, the benefits of zoos existence to both humans and animals outweigh the negative points.
First of all, zoos are not supported by many people because animal rights activists could object to the direct unacceptable effects on animals. This is because zoos prevent animals from developing natural behaviour. Keeping them in captivity leads to the decreasing of self-adaptive instinct in the natural environment, therefore, animals cannot survive in the wild. Furthermore, the cruel treatment from some zoo keepers causes physical injuries to animals. It is clearly seen that some human actions such as beating, electrocuting, and starving to tame violate animal rights. Thus, using zoos as a place, keeping animals from outside is concerned.
On the other hand, there is no doubt that zoos are beneficial in some particular aspects. The first bright point is the conservation in zoos. It could be proved by that protecting endangered animals and rare breeds from extinction maintains biodiversity, also reduces the competition with other animals for finding foods. In addition, the awareness of children about conserving wild animals and saving animal could be raised properly. For example, through some field trips, it would expose the teenagers to the importance of preventing the extinction of wild animals, and the love that humans have for animals may be nurtured.
In conclusion, because the advantages of zoos are greater than their disadvantages, I believe that zoos maintain their legality. In order to limit the drawbacks, the government should invest more money in upgrading zoos effectively.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, may, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1571.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45486111111 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93318528338 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590277777778 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5932174734 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1875 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145495214214 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0524561071316 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337091823044 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931584855144 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0140912025546 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.03 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.46 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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