Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children What are its causes and solutions can be offered

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Modern children are suffering from the diseases that were once considered to be meant for adults only .Obesity is a major disease prevalent among children .What are its causes and solutions can be offered?

In this modern era , Children are having to suffer from a lot of ailments and the rate of diseases are escalating day by day in their daily life but the obesity has become a major problem for children in this time period due to some divergent causes and this essay will describe the several kinds of reason of this problem and some solutions in following paragraphs.
To begin with, excessive use of junk food is the biggest reason of obesity in pupils and they are getting used to junk food like; chocolates ,burger, chips ,coke instead of home made food and these items contain fat and sugar only because parents don’t have a sufficient time to prepare the food for their children due to busy schedule .Therefore, the money is given by them to their children for purchasing a junk food from school canteens. Moreover, most of the leisure time is spent by children for playing games , watching television instead of physical activities so long time sitting creates obesity problem in pupils.
On the flip side, for solving this problem parents and schools have need to motivate the children for taking a healthy diet like ; milk, fruits and fresh vegetables as well as pupils should be taught by parents to prepare the food themselves at home. Further more , students should be aware by school teachers for playing different kind of sports as well as taking participate in competition.
To conclude, teachers and parents both have familiar role to avoid the children from fast food and children should be motivated by them to eat healthiest food as well as physical activities.

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Average: 7.8 (2 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, therefore, well, kind of, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 7.30460921844 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1313.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86296296296 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5029286485 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544444444444 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 404.1 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 45.0 20.2975951904 222% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 108.933338433 49.4020404114 221% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 218.833333333 106.682146367 205% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 45.0 20.7667163134 217% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.3333333333 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.01903807615 398% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226658017996 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111963643725 0.084324248473 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416592594563 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138738758416 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323686698354 0.056905535591 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.0 13.0946893788 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 11.3001002004 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.8 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 9.78957915832 281% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 20.0 10.1190380762 198% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.7795591182 186% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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