Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?
Some children, these days, have an ample number of toys at their disposal. This essay tends to explain the benefit of this trend; thereafter, it will discuss that it may cause children to be spoiled.
One aspect which illustrates the benefit of buying a lot of toys for the little ones can be identified as its effect on developing offspring’s hard-skills. Children play with a variety of toys, thereby increasing their intellect, which in turn allows them to think and act more rationally. Research conducted by Arman Kazemi, a world-renowned child psychologist, has acknowledged that owning a large number of toys makes children’s behavior more logical, and in fact, they are more intelligent than their peers who have fewer dolls. Nevertheless, there is an important drawback to this trend.
Another angle of thoughts on toddler’s ownership of too many toys suggests they might be spoiled. If parents buy too many toys for their children, they will not become familiar with the constraints of life, decreasing their tolerance toward difficulties in life, which in turn will cause them to be incompetent when they have to rely on their own in the real world, therein lies the problem, the real world is where they have to live in when they grow up. Statistics of a study done by the Harvard University in 2015, for instance, showed 87 percent of children who have been raised in privileged families and were provided by a plethora of entertainment means, have difficulty with living independently when they grow up. This evidence illustrates the risk of being spoiled if surrounded by lots of toys.
It is clear that providing kids with a large number of toys may help them to improve their hard-skills, nonetheless, it is possible that this method may render them less able to stand on their own feet when they grow up.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, for instance, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1539.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 308.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99675324675 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9212895762 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568181818182 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 90.4089880707 49.4020404114 183% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.909090909 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.325882835806 0.244688304435 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115312058068 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937806124178 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203432272541 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342897612113 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 50.2224549098 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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