The wellbeing of the masses is one of the main concerns of governments; therefore, improving the health of the people is a vital priority. Some people believe to be successful in the said trend, the number of sporting amenities should be raised. Whereas, others believe alternative methods are needed. I believe the former approach will not be adequate and other methods should be employed in parallel.
People who support increasing the sports facilities argue that deteriorating trend of public health is due to the lack of physical activity. They say by increasing the number of sports facilities people are encouraged to work-out; and hence, will be healthier. Moreover, having more gymnasiums in various places is more is more convenient. For instance, having a gym close-by makes it easier for people in the same zone to use it in bad weather. Furthermore, it decreases the unnecessary expenses such as transportation fee to a distant facility.
On the other hand, other people, myself included, believe there is a cascade of alternative measures that are equally reasonable. Firstly, many people are not aware regarding the dangers of unhealthy activities such as consuming junk food and smoking that they do on a daily basis. Thus, informing the public by methods such as erecting informative billboards is a step in a right direction. Secondly, eliminating causes of a problem can be considered as a solution. Raising the sales-tax on harmful substances and products such as tobacco and alcohol leads to decreasing the number of users; and so, the ailment that is related to abusing these products. Last but not least, Increasing the cost of health care for treatment of diseases caused by unhealthy diet could strenuously prevent people from consciously undermining their general health.
To conclude, increasing the number of sports facilities can admittedly have positive effects on the improvement of people’s health. However, it should be accompanied with other effective methods such as those mentioned above to ensure the optimal outcome.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 247, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...of sporting amenities should be raised. Whereas, others believe alternative methods are...
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Line 3, column 313, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'is more'.
Suggestion: is more
...aving more gymnasiums in various places is more is more convenient. For instance, having a gym ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, as to, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32721712538 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97152676067 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565749235474 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0327577796 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.470588235 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.1176470588 7.06120827912 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262077142419 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0753841972343 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672930571914 0.0667982634062 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161218431287 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426968242561 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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