Some people think women should play an equal role as men in the country's police force, military, and the army, while others believe that women are not suited for this work.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In our ever-changing world, the equality of men and women is extended to combat units. Therefore, contrasting views exist as to whether or not working in such roles is suitable for women. In this essay, both sides of the argument are comprehensively investigated, followed by my personal opinion.
The supporters of gender equality in such occupations enlist a number of reasons behind their viewpoint. Firstly, there should be more emphasis on merits rather than gender. They convincingly explain that in tactical units such as police and military, one’s performance is more important than physical features; hence, by depriving women of being able to join these forces, their quality and efficiency drops. Secondly, by having both men and women in the military, the human resource pool is significantly broadened, which will ensure more rapid response and firmer combat resolve when needed. Last but not least, these days, with the presence of cultural diversity, having female combatant is almost necessary. For instance, religious rules dictate to Muslims not to be touched by opposite gender except close family. Therefore, not having both sex operators in units will result in escalating tensions.
On the other hand, the opposition argues that having women in military or police force has a multitude of disadvantages. First and foremost, physical constraints render combat units inefficient. Take pregnancy as an example, it is not passable to dismiss employees that have important roles for a long period of time because the cohesion of units will be compromised. Furthermore, having women in these units may increase the number of sexual harassment occurrences; consequently, shattering the discipline and moral of combatants. Lastly, having women is in contrast to the military tradition, which puts a high emphasis on brotherhood among company members. From the dawn of military concepts, it was men that carry dangerous missions and faced the enemy in the eye; thus, manly tasks should be done by men and men only.
By the way of conclusion, while both views have convincing arguments regarding the employment of women in military and paramilitary forces, I personally believe the mentioned advantages such as having a wider human resource pool and utilization of merit and outweigh the drawbacks; thus, I strenuously agree with having women in these units.
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Correction:
Correction:
1st body paragraph --> both sex as combat operators ...
2nd body paragraph --> it was men that carried dangerous missions ...
Conclusion --> utilization of merit, outweigh the drawbacks ...
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: WHETHER[4]
Message: Wordiness: Shorten this phrase to the shortest possible suggestion.
Suggestion: whether; whether or not; as to whether
...its. Therefore, contrasting views exist as to whether or not working in such roles is suitable for w...
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Line 1, column 280, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
...ehensively investigated, followed by my personal opinion. The supporters of gender equality i...
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Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...es that have important roles for a long period of time because the cohesion of units will be c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, lastly, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, in contrast, such as, by the way, in contrast to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2012.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39410187668 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92998705731 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571045576408 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 506.74238477 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.9187908399 49.4020404114 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.352941176 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9411764706 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.7647058824 7.06120827912 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.228228533094 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069852111667 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503322346573 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152662249116 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0526961350495 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 78.4519038076 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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