Competition between friends usually negatively impacts friendships.
As a popular adage nowadays goes like, “Friends are God’s way of taking care of us”. There is no denying the fact that friendship functions as the most vial part in our daily life, and friends can impact our characteristics, habit, and even the decision we made. There are those people who hold the idea that competition between friends usually negatively impacts friendships. In my opinion, competition exerts positive effects on friendship because competition makes a friendship healthier, and it creates more valuable memories about this friendship.
Competition helps people reach a healthier friendship in way of encouraging each one in this relationship become a better person. Recent research has found that people who are undergoing a competitive relationship tend to be more self-control and be more persistent when facing difficulties. A prime example from my own experience might shed some light on this point. During my high school period, I treated my deskmate not only as my best friend but as my competitor. We encouraged each other before each test, and determined to exceed each other at the mean time. Finally, we both received great scores at our high school graduation exam, and we still cherished these precious moments we spent together. This example shows how important a friend could be when you are pursuing a goal, and a competition helps you become a better man.
A competitive relationship creates more memorable moments and will be cherished lifetime. As Helen Keller once said, “Walking through darkness with a friend is better than walking alone in light”. Friends are light tower when you are travelling in darkness, and after the storm, you will never forget these time you spent with you friends together. Take my mother’s story for example. She met her lifetime best friend at a dance competition. They are in different age, and comes from different school, but common interest bonds them together. They always competed with each other when they are young, and now my mother still mentions these stories about her and her best friend. Hence, a competition makes your relationship long-last.
Essentially, competition does not hurt a friendship, instead, it helps you reach a healthier relationship with your friends, and at the same time, makes your friendship long-lasting. Thus, I support the idea that competition does not impact friendship negatively.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, hence, if, so, still, thus, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2043.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 385.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30649350649 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98206931383 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553246753247 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 606.6 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.2235251164 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2857142857 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.3333333333 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2380952381 5.45110844103 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248927734895 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782773338934 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.132057565387 0.0737576698707 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157011305338 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109746844133 0.0645574589148 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 10.9000537634 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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