Environmental problems and economy prosperity are always on the agenda of the government. Some governments give priority to the environment, while others consider economy as the most crucial. As far as I am concerned, both the environment and the economy should be paid attention to in order to ensure the well-being of the citizens.
On the one hand, environment problems may pose a threat to our normal lives. Firstly, environmental contamination is detrimental to our health. According to a recent survey which is conducted by a famous international organization, in order to reap great benefits, some merchants build a host of chemical factories around a small village which is located in south China. These factories pour polluted water into the river, as a result of which, many villagers suffer from various cancers. In fact, there are few places where you can not find similar cases. Secondly, environmental problems may also spoil the pleasure of living. An example of myself would aptly illustrate my point. This spring an unexpected sandstorm happened which disarranged my schedule my trip to Tai Lake where I could have enjoyed the natural scenery. When I went to the car park I was surprised to find my car is completely covered with a thin layer of dust. Then I drove my car to have the car have the dust removed but the queue was endless since numerous people were waiting to have their dusty cars cleaned.
On the other hand, a well-developed economy is necessary for each family to make a living. Without sufficient money, nobody could ever enjoy a satisfactory life. First of all, only with enough money can people’s basic lives be guaranteed. Some authoritative newspaper once reported that children in some improvised areas can not pay intuition and drop of school. What is worse, due to lack of money, s serious disease may mean death to these children. In addition, good economy is a prerequisite of the society’s safety and stability. Healthy economy means sufficient jobs for the citizens. Once the community is confronted with depressed economy, a host of workers will be laid-off, and the immediate consequence is a rapid increase in the number of crimes.
To conclude, either environmental problems or desperate economy would impede the well-being of the citizenry. A sensible government should focus on both fields to create a better life for people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 827, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...could have enjoyed the natural scenery. When I went to the car park I was surprised ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, in addition, in fact, as a result, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 393.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10687022901 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98000336811 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608142493639 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.2202819173 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2608695652 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0869565217 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21739130435 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.071786420705 0.236089414692 30% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0208275444173 0.076458572812 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0241698862519 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0468410088078 0.150856017488 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148096901168 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.7 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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