Succed in a job is a universal tendency. Many people finds their way of success by studying hard in school, however, many others have the ability to communicate well and extent their relationship with diverse people. Personally I believe that this is better to keep communication and well relationship rather than studying hard. So, I agree with the statement fir the following reasons:
First of all, the ability to relate well to people cause to know more people and get more job opportunity. This is cardinal to know how to communicate to satisfy people for getting better job. My personal experience is a compelling example of this, about three years ago, after my gratuation of university, I found a typical job as an intern. I started to get aquanited with every single person who works around there, approximately 6 months later I was offered to work for three different organization at the same time. Finally I could opt the best one and improved my job skills and experiences there for about three years.
Secondly, when a person have ability to relate well to people, this will strengthen the social behavior and also commincation skill of that person, this means to have cardinal skill to achieve success. For instance, my uncle is who I always enjoy to talk with, he is incredible with his communication skill. His colleagues wants to be his close friend and evermore help him in every situation in the office, This is the good point of having an attractive prestige of communication.
Ultimately, I am of the opinion that key of success in the ability to communicate well. This is because the mentioned ability help us to extend our job opportunity and because this ability will improbe the communication skill and social behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 58, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'knowing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: knowing
... ability to relate well to people cause to know more people and get more job opportunit...
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Line 2, column 522, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...ifferent organization at the same time. Finally I could opt the best one and improved m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for instance, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1452.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 296.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90540540541 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84159178994 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557432432432 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.5791138714 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.692307692 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.30769230769 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249285041006 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936120380267 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0747747113936 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152671468116 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072368654817 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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