Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In contemporary society, different people hold different perspectives on their life’s purpose. However, some people argue that, most people in this present day, choose to spend their time doing their beloved activities rather than concentrating on what they should do. Although it seems to lack a correctly answer, I personally agree with people now focus on using their times to enjoy things, that they satisfy. This essay will provide further aspects why I agree with such notion, and offer more examples to support this idea.
First of all, definitely, doing beloved activities soothe your soul, and effectively improve your skill. It is undeniable that enjoyment things fulfill your life's passion, moreover create your life to be meaningful. Additionally, action things with willingness, will truly develop your skill to work more effectively than you taking time on something out of your attention. To illustrate this, my family and I love to travel a lot; I have to go to many places such as Japan and Korea, and using all the holiday from my architecture designer's work times to travel, is enjoyable. In fact, furthermore, travelling literally raises my job passion. Observing on many cultures and architectures inspires my creativity and broaden my design to have more international identities.
Secondly, I am of the opinion that people will perform something out well if works are their personal favor. You will obviously concentrate on your enjoyment matters than others that you are not interested in. Therefore, the more intention you have, the more quality works you get. I can attest to this reason from my own experience. Definitely, since I was a child, I always love traveling and drawing some buildings around me. Moreover, during my travel, I was who spent free time to design some creative architecture from my observation then sketch it in papers. That’s the after reason why I designed my life to become an architect. In this case, it clearly proves why I completely prefer that people should take time on things their love.
In conclusion, I obviously agree that people need to spending time on beloved matters more than doing your duty. This is due to the fact that people are not only capable to readily acquire much knowledge and skills from their beloved activities, but they also make something out well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: You used an adverb ('correctly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('answer') instead of another adjective.
...ey should do. Although it seems to lack a correctly answer, I personally agree with people now foc...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1975.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14322916667 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77236872991 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559895833333 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8938979257 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.75 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2 5.45110844103 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284355948677 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0820562993603 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853909437794 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188183202472 0.150856017488 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0740489676445 0.0645574589148 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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