People can take care of their family members better when they live in big cities than in the countryside.
How do you define “taking care of the family members”? In my opinion, it’s not just cook the dinner or do the laundry; more importantly, it means creating an environment where our family members—both our parents and kid can develop better, live healthily and happily. In such sense, living in big cities wins me over.
The primary concern is the education for children in the family, and of course the big city is a much wiser choice. Big cities never fail to attract prestigious teachers, who both excel in academic skills and are proficient in applying the most proper teaching methodology when guiding children. For instance, in a typical English class in Beijing, the teacher might start a new lesson by playing an interesting clip from an English movie; and thus students’ interest and attention will be naturally aroused; but in the remote countryside, the majority of the teachers are still following what we call “force-feeding” education, featured by reading after the lines in textbooks lesson after lesson. Equipment is another concern. We all would understand that children could better understand the process of cell division if a microscope is at their hand. But the truth is that in the countryside, there are barely enough chairs for children to sit, not to mention those necessary but expensive equipment.
Also let’s not forget about the older ones, whose mental and physical health would be better maintained in metropolises. In big cities, eligible doctors and nurses gather and are readily approachable if some certain diseases suddenly hit. As a result, some diseases that seem to be fatal for the medical team in the countryside might just be a small piece of cake for their counterparts in cities such as Beijing and Shanghai. Apart from the physical health, another factor that calls for our attention is the older people’s mental health. Gradually getting away from the glory in their career, older people sometimes would be anxious and depressed. Of course, they need something else to attract their attention and to spend more time on. For instance, our mothers in their 50s might need some square dance team, in which they could find friends of the same interest, and our fathers might want to join a golf club to kill the time. Needless to say, big cities abound in such groups and teams, while in the countryside, the older people might suffer from sheer loneliness at their home.
Here I think I have made myself quite clear: for the better sake of both our parents and kids, we’d better choose to live in big cities, rather than in the small countryside.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... necessary but expensive equipment. Also let's not forget about the older o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, thus, while, apart from, for instance, i think, of course, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2209.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05491990847 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84286056948 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 663.3 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.6280525108 48.9658058833 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.722222222 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2777777778 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280379905647 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796088588366 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053055258173 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166319259494 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449234777672 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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