Government should reduce their investment in arts, music and painting. Do you agree or disagree
The importance of reducing investment in art, music and painting, which was always debatable, has now become more controversial. The substantial influence of these profession has sparked the controversy over the potential impact of this trend on people over the years. It can be said that government should not reduce money due to hinder one’s ability to grow further, however it has some drawbacks as well. This essay will elaborate how it gives a myriad of benefits and how it wastes time and money of government and thus lead to a logical reasons.
At the outset, there are numerous reasons why government should not reduce money, but the most conspicuous one stems from the fact that these profession unearth individual talent and showcases their creativity, which could be polished into a proper career for these individuals. For instance, a survey conducted by University of Adelaide 70% creativity can be increased by government funding because some people have talent but they are unable due to lack of funds. Hence it is elixir to increase funds for betterment of people.
Nevertheless, there remain some drawbacks, which can certainly overwhelm the potential influence of investing, but the most alarming one is rooted in the fact that these are those occupations where a massive scale of success cannot be achieved due to low return on investment. For example, government revealed that instead of investing money on these professions can be used to solve environment problems, which gives plethora of benefits to humankind. Therefore, government should focus on global problems.
From what has been discussed above, it can be said that the impact of those profession is prominent, although the way, it sharpens people skills should not be overlooked
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, look, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 10.5418719212 142% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 6.10837438424 196% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 5.94088669951 168% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 20.9802955665 110% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 31.9359605911 113% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 5.75862068966 243% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 1207.87684729 124% => OK
No of words: 284.0 242.827586207 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25704225352 5.00649968141 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 3.92707691288 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84626203954 2.71678728327 105% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 139.433497537 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577464788732 0.580463131201 99% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 379.143842365 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.57093596059 102% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.931034482759 215% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.65517241379 55% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 12.6551724138 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.2736351471 50.4703680194 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.727272727 104.977214359 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.9669160288 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 7.25397266985 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.33497536946 94% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 6.9802955665 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 2.75862068966 36% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 2.91625615764 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154639055031 0.242375264174 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0650472277731 0.0925447433944 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601732230044 0.071462118173 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906203383145 0.151781067708 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0466309244339 0.0609392437508 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 12.6369458128 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 53.1260098522 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.54236453202 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.9458128079 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 11.5310837438 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.32886699507 114% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 55.0591133005 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.94827586207 111% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.5123152709 105% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 77.7777777778 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 70.0 Out of 90
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